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So many sweet memories of friends and colleagues each year at San Francisco Writers Conference . . .

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And, I shall be with these friends and colleagues again, soon.  My heart is heavy though (as many other hearts are) missing Kathi Kamen Goldmark’s smile; perhaps she’ll be smiling on us at the conference.

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San Francisco Writers Conference

COME TO SAN FRANCISCO THIS PRESIDENT’S DAY WEEKEND
and GET PUBLISHED!
Join us Presidents’ Day Weekend for the SFWC MAIN CONFERENCE
February 13-16, 2014–at the Mark Hopkins Hotel.
Also available: 18 low-cost, in-depth SFWC OPEN ENROLLMENT CLASSES
taught by conference presenters on February 13th & 17th.

 

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Top Ten Reasons for Writers to Attend the 2014 San Francisco Writers Conference

      • Launch your writing career–or take it to a more professional level–with direction from bestselling authors and publishing experts.
      • Choose from a schedule of workshops, panels and sessions that fit your specific writing needs and goals.
      • Get your questions answered at the Ask-a-Pro session featuring New York and California editors…included in your registration fee.
      • Go to Speed Dating for Agents – Pitch your book ideas one-on-one in a room full of literary agents ($50 option for registered attendees)
      • Receive free feedback on your work from freelance book editors.
      • Kick back in Cafe Ferlinghetti with writers from all over the country…and foreign countries, too.
      • Talk with exhibitors and find out what’s new for writers.
      • Browse our onsite bookstore (produced by BookShop West Portal) and you can get the books you purchase autographed by the presenters.
      • Jump into pitch contests, “Open Mic” readings, and socialize at our Gala Welcome party. This is just a sampling of SFWC’s over-the-top networking opportunities during the event.
      • Stay awhile longer with our optional in-depth Pre Conference classes on Thursday, February 13th and Post Conference classes on Monday, February 17th to increase the value of the conference even more.

CONFERENCE registration fee includes four days of sessions & keynotes, two breakfasts/two lunches, a Welcome Gala, unlimited networking, and more!   CLICK HERE to register now.

Optional Pre & Post Event In-Depth Writing Classes on Thursday, February 13th in the evening and all day Monday, February 17th taught by some of the presenters. CLICK HERE

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Yours truly will be co-presenting 2 sessions

Friday, Feb. 14, 2014,  3:00-3:45pm at SFWC

Elisa “Sasa” Southard & Teresa LeYung-Ryan

present their interactive session

FROM HOOKS TO BOOKS: Grabbing the Attention of Agents and Editors with Your Talking Tagline & Platform

 

  • create your talking-tagline (for query letter, book proposal, press releases) to hook agents, acquisition editors, readers, and the media
  • make your name synonymous with the themes you write about
  • have fun building your platform (for fiction and nonfiction writers)

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Saturday, Feb. 15, 2014, 11:00-11:45am

Mary E. Knippel & Teresa LeYung-Ryan

present:

BE YOUR OWN EDITOR:  Ensuring Agents and Editors Love Your Work”

Learn how to inject the “5 Ws & Core Theme” and take your fiction, narrative nonfiction or prescriptive-nonfiction manuscript to the next phase.

  • even if you are in a critique group or preparing to hire an editor or a book doctor
  • whether you are planning to be your own publisher or pitch to agents and acquisition editors
  • save money and avoid headaches

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For full schedule:  http://sfwriters.org/conference-schedule/

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Sincerely,

Teresa LeYung-Ryan

Teresa’s novel Love Made of Heart: a Mother’s Mental Illness Forges Forgiveness in Daughter Ruby is used in college courses and archived at the San Francisco History Center.

As author of Build Your Writer’s Platform & Fanbase In 22 Days: Attract Agents, Editors, Publishers, Readers, and Media Attention NOW, Coach Teresa helps clients identify their themes and archetypes.

http://writingcoachTeresa.com   Subscribe to  “Coach Teresa’s blog”

 

 

 

2012 March 24 in San Francisco “Meet and Speed Date with Agents, Acquisition Editors, and Publisher”

signature event of  Women’s National Book Association–SF Chapter

Meg Waite Clayton–keynoter at luncheon (optional)

More info and registration: http://wnba-sfchapter.org

Lynn Henriksen chairs event

Teresa LeYung-Ryan, Mary E. Knippel, Tanya Egan Gibson will coach registrants on how to pitch 8:00-9:00am.

 

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WNBA colleague Ann Steiner, Ph.D.MFT, CGP (author of Starting and Sustaining Groups that Thrive: Workbook and Planning Guide) highly recommends Dr. Paul Watsky’s workshop March 23-25, 2012.  Dr. Steiner says:

Dear fellow writers, artists and creatives,

Would you like a weekend devoted to exploring the challenges and rewards of practicing your creative art?

This workshop provides a safe place to deal with such common emotional obstacles as identity, follow-through, isolation, motivation, negative self-talk, and rejection.

This weekend workshop is offered by the Jungian analyst and San Francisco poet, Dr. Paul Watsky. Please forward this announcement to interested colleagues and contact Dr. Watsky directly if you have any questions.

When: Friday evening, March 23rd – 25th

Where: Inverness, CA

Workshop Size: Limited to Twelve Participants

About the Workshop Leader

Paul Watsky, Ph.D., ABPP is a licensed clinical psychologist with over thirty years’ experience in his field, an analyst member of the CG Jung Institute of San Francisco, and a widely published poet, whose debut collection, Telling The Difference (Fisher King Press) was published in 2010. Before becoming a psychologist he taught English literature full time as an Assistant Professor at San Francisco State University, and has continued to teach and lecture through the public programs of the CG Jung Institute and various other organizations.

For Information and Registration please call: 415 346-0253

 

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Speaking of creative art . . .  Mary E. Knippel’s book The Secret Artist – Give Yourself Permission to Let Your Creativity Shine is scheduled to debut by late Spring 2012!

 

Sincerely,

Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan

“Reach out, not stress out, to materialize your dearest dreams!”

http://writingcoachteresa.com

Build Your Writer’s Platform & Fanbase In 22 Days: Attract Agents, Editors, Publishers, Readers, and Media Attention NOW

As editor/story consultant, Coach Teresa helps her clients polish their manuscripts by identifying their themes, universal archetypes, front-story and back-story.  http://writingcoachteresa.com

Her novel Love Made of Heart is used in college composition classes. Thank you, Teachers & Students!

Author / Story Consultant / Writers' Platform-Building Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan -- photo by Cyberspace Guru Linda Lee

 

Coach Teresa and Colleagues at San Francisco Writers Conference

To register for SFWC  San Francisco Writers Conference

 

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Mentor Mary E. Knippel & Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan--photo by Anne Campagnet-Reed

Thursday, February 16, 2012  6:00pm

Mary E. Knippel & Teresa LeYung-Ryan

BEING YOUR OWN EDITOR: Ensuring Your Work is 100% Before Taking the Next Step:

Attend this session if you want to Polish Your Manuscripts before:

•             hiring book doctor/developmental editor OR

•             pitching to agents or acquisition editors OR

•             self-publishing

Mary E. Knippel is author of The Secret Artist – Give Yourself Permission to Let Your Creativity Shine!

Teresa LeYung-Ryan is author of Build Your Writer’s Platform & Fanbase In 22 Days: Attract Agents, Editors, Publishers, Readers, and Media Attention NOW and Love Made of Heart

Also, Mary E. Knippel and Teresa LeYung-Ryan are scheduled to give one-on-one 10-minute consultations at San Francisco Writers Conference!


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Friday, February 17, 2012  9:00am

Elisa “Sasa” Southard & Teresa LeYung-Ryan

BLOWING UP YOUR BALLOON: Writing a Tag-Line That Will Sell You and Your Book

Attend this session if you want to:
• hook agents, acquisition editors, readers, media attention
• make your name synonymous with the themes you write about
• have fun building your writer’s platform & fanbase

To register for SFWC  San Francisco Writers Conference

 

Elisa “Sasa” Southard is author of Break Through the Noise: 9 Tools to Propel Your Marketing Message

Teresa LeYung-Ryan is author of Build Your Writer’s Platform & Fanbase In 22 Days: Attract Agents, Editors, Publishers, Readers, and Media Attention NOW and Love Made of Heart

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Listed below are 2 events — free and open to the public.

Thursday, February 16th, 2012 at 5 p.m.

San Francisco Writers Conference Presents a Free Public Reading

Lisa See reads from Dreams of Joy in the California Room at the Mark Hopkins Hotel in San Francisco

 

Saturday, February 18th, 2012 at 6:15 p.m.

San Francisco Writers Conference Mass Booksigning!

Thirty presenters will sign in the Room of the Dons at the Mark Hopkins. Books for sale at the onsite bookstore manned by BookShop West Portal.

 

Look for Teresa LeYung-Ryan, Elisa Southard, Mary E. Knippel, Barbara Santos, Martha Alderson, Linda Lee, Linda Joy Myers, Margie Yee Webb, Verna Dreisbach, Nina Amir, Cara Black, Zoe FitzGerald Carter, Joan Gelfand, Tanya Egan Gibson, Ann Seymour, Ellen Sussman, Wendy Tokunaga, Shulamit Sofia, and other Women’s National Book Association members.


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The following lists are from San Francisco Writers Conference

KEYNOTERS:
Lisa See
, author of Peony in Love and Shanghai Girls
Lolly Winston, author of Good Grief and Happiness Sold Elsewhere
Alan Rinzler
, independent editor with 50 years experience in the publishing world whose client list is a “Who’s Who” in the publishing industry

PRESENTERS:
Martha Alderson, author The Plot Whisperer: Secerts of Story Structure Any Writer Can Master
Nina Amir, editor, journalist, writing and author coach
Bella Andre, author of From This Moment On
Marilyn R. Atlas, Producer and personal manager in Hollywood
Sam Barry, Marketing Manager at HarperOne
Cara Black, author of Murder in Passy
Helena R. Brantley, Red Pencil PR
Philippa Burgess co-founder of Creative Convergence
Zoe FitzGerald Carter, author of Imperfect Endings: A Daughter’s Story of Love, Loss and Letting Go
Stephanie Chandler, author, online marketing and social networking guru
Laura Cogan from Zyzzyva
Mark Coker, founder and CEO of Smashwords
Deborah Davis, author of Not like You
Drew Dellinger, internationally known speaker, poet, writer and visionary
Robert Dugoni, author of Wrongful Death and Murder One
Brian Felsen, president of BookBaby / CD Baby / HostBaby
Joel Friedlander, Marin Bookworks & author of A Self-Publisher’s Companion
Barbara Freethy, NYT best-selling author
Catherine Friend, author of Barn Boot Blues and Sheepish
Diane Gedymin, The Publisher’s Desk
Joan Gelfand, poet and author of A Dreamer’s Guide to Cities and Streams
Tanya Egan Gibson , author of How to Buy a Love of Reading
Constance Hale is the author of Sin and Syntax and Wired Style
Brad Henderson, UC Davis professor and poet (co-author of Split Stock)
Evan Karp, Quiet Lightning
Kathi Kamen-Goldmark, author of And My Shoes Keep Walking Back to You
Katharine Kerr, author of License to Ensorcell due out in February
Carla King, author of The Self-Publishing Boot Camp Guide for Authors
Bharti Kirchner, author of four novels and four cookbooks
Michael Krasny, author and KQED radio host
Linda Lee, Founder of Askmepc-webdesign & Smart Women Stupid Computers
Wendy Lesser, author of Music For Silenced Voices, editor of The Threepenny Review
Donna Levin, author/writing teacher
Beth Lisick, author, poet and playwright among many of her talents
Tom Meschery, poet – athlete
Michelle Moran, author of Madame Tussaud, A Novel of the French Revolution
Mari Naomi, author/illustrator of Kiss & Tell: A Romantic Resume, Ages 0 – 22
Kathryn Otoshi, author/illustrator of What Emily Saw
Holly Lynn Payne, screenwriter, writing coach and author of Kingdom of Simplicity
Dan Poynter, Para Publishing – Self-Publishing Guru
Lisa Marie Rice, author of Nightfire
Trina Robbins, author of Lily Renee, Escape Artist
Teresa LeYung Ryan, author of Build Your Writer’s Platform & Fanbase In 22 Days: Attract Agents, Editors, Publishers, Readers, and Media Attention NOW
Robert D. San Souci, author of Robin Hood and the Golden Arrow
Barbara Santos, author of Maui Onion Cookbook and Practice Aloha
Monte Schulz, author of This Side of Jordan
Kemble Scott, author of SOWER 2.0
Ann Seymour, author of I’ve Always Loved You, Nob Hill Gazette journalist
Naheed Senzai, author of Shooting Kabul
Rusty Shelton, President and CEO of Shelton Interactive
Sheldon Siegel, author of Judgment Day
Kevin Smokler, author of Bookmark Now
Elisa Southard, author of Break Through the Noise
Melissa Stonehill, VP Marketing & Publicity at Silver Screen Sizzles
Ransom Stephens, author of The God Patent
Ellen Sussman, author of French Lessons
Patrick Schwerdrfeger, author and international speaker
Wendy Tokunaga
, author of Midori by Moonlight
Penny Warner, author of How to Host a Killer Party
Fan Wu, author of Beautiful As Yesterday
Martin Yan, chef. author and TV personality

EDITORS:
Elfrieda Abbe, Publisher, The Writer magazine at Kalmbach Publishing
Charles Adams, Algonquin Publishers
Jennifer Enderlin, VP, Editor-in-Chief at St. Martin’s Press
Valerie Gray, Executive Editor at MIRA Books, a Harlequin imprint
Gabrielle Harbowy, Dragon Moon Press and Pyr
Georgia Hughes, New World Library
Jan Johnson, RedWheel/Weiser
Brenda Knight, Associate Publisher at Cleis Press, Berkeley CA
Heather Lazare, Simon & Schuster
Deborah Lichtman, private writing consultant and editior.
Ross E. Lockhart, Managing Editor at Night Shade Books
Allison Lorentzen, Editor at Penguin Books
Ethan Nosowsky, Editorial Director at McSweeny’s
Chuck Sambuchino, Editor at Writers Digest Books and edits Guide To Literary Agents
Jay Schaefer, Independent editor/writer based in San Francisco
Jill Schwartzman, Editor at Dutton – Penguin Group
Ralph Scott, Executive Editor at Credit The Edit

AGENTS:
Peter Beren, literary agent and publishing consultant (CA)
Kimberley Cameron, President of Kimberley Cameron & Associates (CA)
Minju Chang, Book Stop Literary Agency (CA)
Verna Dreisbach, Dreisbach Literary Management (CA)
April Eberhardt, April Eberhardt Literary (CA/NYC)
Stephany Evans, President/Agent at FinePrint Literary Management (NYC)
Laurie Fox, Linda Chester Literary Agency – West Coast Associate
Mollie Glick, Foundry Literary & Media (NY)
Jeff Kleinman, Folio Literary Management (NYC)
Mary Kole, Andrea Brown Literary Agency (CA/NYC)
Michael Larsen, Larsen/Pomada Literary Agents (SF)
Daniel Lazar, Writers House Literary Agency (NYC)
Taylor Martindale, Full Circle Literary (CA)
Laurie McLean, Larsen/Pomada Literary Agents (SF)
Elizabeth Pomada, Larsen/Pomada Literary Agents (SF)
Jody Rein, President of Jody Rein Books, Inc (CO)
Katharine Sands, Sarah Jane Freymann Agency (NYC)
Ken Sherman, Ken Sherman and Associates
Nephele Tempest, The Knight Agency (Atlanta/CA)
Sally van Haitsma, van Haitsma Literary (CA)
Gordon Warnock, Andrea Hurst & Associates (CA)
Ted Weinstein, Ted Weinstein Literary Management (NYC/SF)

This list is subject to change without notice.

Coach Teresa, How do I fix my children’s story? Agent says it’s too episodic.

In my previous blog post about how to remedy an episodic storyline  . . . here’s an argument from one of my clients who writes children’s books . . .

“But kids aren’t that sophisticated, are they? Shouldn’t stories for that age group be episodic?”

Coach Teresa here . . .  Kids know what a good story is, especially if they’ve read the timeless classics (to name a few:  The Hobbit; The Wind In the Willows; Charlotte’s Web; The Phantom Tollbooth; The Lion, the Witch and the Wardrobe. What are other memorable children’s books? Wordsworth the Poet by Frances Kakugawa is a contemporary favorite of mine )

Also, keep in mind that a children’s story has to hook adults (agents, acquisition editors, publishers, booksellers, reviewers, shoppers).  How do you hook adult-readers, even if you choose to be your own publisher?

Answer:  Create memorable characters and follow screenwriting teacher Terrel Seltzer’s advice:  “Someone we care about wants something badly and is having a terrible time getting it.”

Here’s my post from May 26, 2011 about Terrel

I encourage you to set the stage.  Give the reader sensory details—not only sight and hearing but also taste, smell and touch.

To create a story with thematic significance, let your metaphors / similes / inferences move your story forward or provide clues.

 

 

 

Coach Teresa says: “Reach out, not stress out, when pursuing your dreams!”

Want to attract agents  & publishers?  Want to be your own publisher?

Email:  writingcoachTeresa    at    gmail.com

http://writingcoachTeresa.com

Coach Teresa  LeYung-Ryan loves to edit:

  • novels & memoirs with feisty protagonists and universal messages;
  • children’s novels that help young readers understand their feelings and build self-confidence

 

Coach Teresa, when and where is the Sonoma County Book Festival 2011?

September 24, 2011  10:00am – 4:00pm

The Sonoma County Book Festival

Old Courthouse Square, Santa Rosa, CA

Teresa LeYung-Ryan says: “Special thanks to Kate Farrell, Ana Manwaring, Linda Loveland Reid and everyone at Redwood Writers! I’m so happy to return to the Sonoma County Book Festival this year, sharing a booth with Kate Farrell & Margie Yee Webb (two of my favorite colleagues from Women’s National Book Association and California Writers Club) and showcasing my new workbook Build Your Writer’s Platform & Fanbase In 22 Days. Maxine Hong Kingston, the author who had inspired me to write my novel, will be there too! I use my novel Love Made of Heart to inspire adult children of mentally ill parents to speak openly about the stigmas and find resources for their families. Maxine plays a huge role in my workbook as well. Can’t wait to see her and be with all fellow literacy advocates. I love helping fiction & nonfiction authors attract agents, acquisition editors, publishers, readers, and media attention before and after publication. Please visit my blog http://writingcoachteresa.com for more resources. My motto: Reach out, not stress out, when pursuing your dreams.”

Writing Career Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan (who helps writers build their platforms and fanbases) celebrates literacy -- photo by MKWL

 

 

In the summer of 1999, I took 2 three-week leaves-of-absence from my full time day job to plunge into what I knew would be the final rewrite of my novel Love Made of Heart (the story inspired by my mother–a beautiful woman who suffered mental illness all her life).  Three writers (Luisa Adams, Martha Alderson, Susan Canale) read that draft and gave me the most helpful criticism.  I made the improvements.  That summer I queried about 60 agents. By autumn, four agents asked for an exclusive read… I followed protocol.

In December that year, Stacey Glick of Dystel Literary Management (now Dystel & Goderich Literary Management) gifted me with these words: “Teresa, you’re a talented writer.  I would like to represent you.”

An agent’s advocacy doesn’t guarantee landing a publisher.  After receiving 22 rejections from all the acquisition editors she pitched to, and another seven months had passed, Stacey had incredible news.  It’s now April 2001, editorial director John Scognamiglio of Kensington Publishing NY had called Stacey Glick; Kensington wanted to make me an offer–to buy the publishing rights of my novel.  Laurie Perkin was the publisher; Debbie Tobias was Sales Director; Lou Malcangi for lovely book cover; Libba Bray (who is now an author of young adult books) for book jacket copy; Jacquie Edwards for copy editing; everyone who helped in the publishing process. I’ll show my “Acknowledgments”  in Love Made of Heart as another blog post.

Fast forward (I had to deliver more rewrites) . . . eighteen months later on October 1, 2002 the hardcover edition of Love Made of Heart made its debut.  I had so many people to thank. And so many presentations to deliver.

In October 2003 the trade paperback edition of  Love Made of Heart was released.

The trade paperback edition has the same striking book cover as the hardcover.  The trade paperback has my Author’s Note to Reader that the hardcover edition doesn’t have.

Author’s Note to Reader

Thank you for letting me share Ruby Lin’s story with you.  Many readers have asked me what the characters in the novel have done for me.  My answer is this: I’ve learned that behind every face is a compelling story.

Please remember me as a writer who says YES! to compassion for mental illness and NO! to domestic violence and child abuse.

Who is Mrs. Nussbaum?  She lives in all our hearts.  Just as we have the “child within,” we also have the “wise elder within.”  May you always embrace your compelling story and allow your Mrs. Nussbaum to embrace you.

Sincerely,

Teresa LeYung Ryan

Love Made of Heart book cover www.LoveMadeOfHeart.com

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Build Your Writer's Platform & Fanbase In 22 Days Since 2007 I’ve been a writing career coach.  Since January 2010 I’ve been known as “22-Day Coach Teresa”   The new edition of Build Your Writer’s Platform & Fanbase In 22 Days: Attract Agents, Editors, Publishers, Readers, and Media Attention NOW is available through Amazon.  I created the fun workbook to help fiction and nonfiction authors gain a competitive edge.  Whether you want to be your own publisher or sell rights to another publisher, attract readers and more readers now!  http://writingcoachteresa.com

To comment on any of my columns (blog posts) or to contact me, just click on the blue title bar of the post, fill in the boxes and press “submit.”

 

What to do before hiring an editor for your manuscript?

 

My advice for narrative non-fiction writers is the same for fiction writers.

“Look at Your Manuscript with an Editor’s Lens”

by Teresa LeYung Ryan–Developmental Editor/Manuscript Consultant/Writing Career Coach


Since writing a story with the intent to engage the reader is so much like meeting a stranger and wanting him/her to be interested in us, I will focus on “how to make the first quarter of your story a compelling read.”

I love working with diligent writers who want to transform their manuscripts into page-turners. However, there are things you can do before you give your work to an editor. Let me show you how you can help yourself.

Does your manuscript pass these tests?

  • Planting hook(s) or story-question(s);
  • Grounding the reader with the three Ws and the big C (Who?  When?  Where? Circumstances);
  • Showing (not telling) what the protagonist wants;
  • Paying attention to language and rules

Let’s learn from the pros.

Planting Hook or Story-Question:

In The Woman Warrior: Memoirs of a Girlhood Among Ghosts, Maxine Hong Kingston hooks us with the first line: “You must not tell anyone,” my mother said, “what I am about to tell you…”   Then, Ms. Kingston transitions into her story with:  “Whenever she had to warn us about life, my mother told stories that ran like this one . . .”

Grounding the Reader with the Three Ws and the big C:

In Woven of Water, while the story timeline spans from 1957 to 2005, Californian author Luisa Adams brilliantly shows us who she was as a girl (not with a year-by-year narrative, but with a single exquisite chapter).  Because she grounded us with “who, when, where” and the “circumstances” as to why she had left her love affair with water, we eagerly follow as she takes us into her enchanted world of a “cottage in the forest.”  Another device to ground the reader is the employment of sensory details (not long descriptions).  Sensory details put the reader in the scene/story world.  Re-read one of your favorite author’s books. Study from the masters.

Showing What the Protagonist Wants:

In The Other Mother, young Carol Schaefer wants to ask questions:  “Was there any way to keep my baby?  Was there anyone who would help me find a way to do that?”

In Eat, Pray, Love, Elisabeth Gilbert says: I wish Giovanni would kiss me.

In Love Made of Heart, my protagonist Ruby Lin prays: Please don’t end up like Grandmother (while witnessing police officers escorting her own mother out of her apartment).

Paying Attention to Language and Rules:

Read the first five pages of Angela’s Ashes by Frank McCourt and you will see how this wordsmith plays with language and rules. (You can “bend” the rules to create flow, but you must not ignore them.)

In Bastard Out of Carolina, Dorothy Allison’s protagonist Bone is a girl.  Bone’s voice is convincing in dialogue and in internal monologue. Brilliant use of dialect.

Sentences Deserve Your Attention:

Remember Groucho Marx’s line “One morning I shot an elephant in my pajamas…”? That sentence got a lot of laughs.  But, what if you didn’t want to be funny (ambiguous in this case)?

How would you rewrite these sentences?  See the misplaced modifiers?

  • He likes to fish near the Farallon Islands, they jump when they’re hungry at dawn or dusk. (the islands jump?)
  • She insists on knowing when I come home and leave, not to be nosy, but for safety reasons. (who is not nosy?)
  • Being cautious as not to step on the dog’s tail, the children tip-toed away from him while sleeping. (who’s sleeping?)

To improve your sentence structure and other skills, I recommend these books:

  • The Elements of Style by William Strunk, Jr. and E.B. White
  • Woe is I: Grammarphobe’s Guide to Better English in Plain English by Patricia T. O’Conner

More Advice:

  • In all the stories I referenced above, the authors present memorable experiences by employing authentic details, unusual story-worlds though real, and poetic language. You want to do the same for your story.
  • Also, these stories have another vital component–all the plotlines have what Martha Alderson, author of Blockbuster Plots Pure and Simple, calls “Cause and Effect” linked scenes.  Another must-read blog:  http://plotwhisperer.blogspot.com/search?q=first+quarter
  • When you’re writing non-fiction and you do not have the luxury of rearranging the sequence of events to create a page-turning plotline, you can engage the reader by using concise expositions to leap over blocks of time in order to focus on the core themes and fast-forward to the next scene.  A helpful website for memoir writers: http://www.memoriesandmemoirs.com
  • You the author must show the reader what the protagonist wants, even if the protagonist doesn’t know at first.
  • We don’t have to “like” a protagonist, but, we do need to connect with him/her on an emotional level. Perhaps what he/she wants is also what we want.
  • Story-telling is a skill learned, practiced, and mastered. May you practice with joy.

In the fiercely competitive arena of the publishing world, how does one stand out in a crowd?  Building relationships is one key to success in this business. Another key is to know how to translate the themes from your life to your writing and articulate those themes as community concerns.  I want to see all hardworking writers realize their dreams. My best wishes to you!

To read other posts in my blog (about writing contests, publishing opportunities, more tips on platform-building), click on [ Home ] and scroll down  OR key in words in the search box to find specific posts. Example: if you key in the words: poetry anthology 2011 into my blog’s search box and click [search], you will see my post containing info about the  Las Positas College Anthology and other contests for other genres (Thank you, Poet Laureate Deborah Grossman!) To read the entire version of a post, click on the title bar of that post.

To see my website for all my books, go to:  http://writingcoachteresa.com

Reach out, not stress out!

Sincerely,

Build-Your-Writer’s-Platform Coach Teresa

Teresa LeYung Ryan–Developmental Editor/Manuscript Consultant, Writing Career Coach, Author, Publisher

Teresa specializes in editing fiction and narrative non-fiction with themes on the human condition.

She likes spunky protagonists in thrillers, women’s novels, memoirs, and children’s literature.

Love Made of Heart is:
• recommended by the California School Library Association and the California Reading Association

• read by students at Stanford University, U.C. Berkeley, CCSF, and many other colleges and high schools.

• used in Advanced Composition English-as-a-Second-Language classes
• archived at the San Francisco History Center

Teresa says: “The more you read, the more your own writing will flow.”  
Please click here for my blog’s home page  http://lovemadeofheart.com/blog/

My fun workbook is now available through Amazon!

BUILD YOUR WRITER’S PLATFORM & FANBASE IN 22 DAYS: Attract Agents, Editors, Publishers, Readers, and Media Attention NOW

http://www.amazon.com/Build-Your-Writers-Platform-Fanbase/dp/0983010005/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&s=books&qid=1297630400&sr=1-1

http://lovemadeofheart.com/BUILD-YOUR-WRITER%27S-PLATFORM-&-FANBASE-IN-22-DAY