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Writing Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan here . . . to give writers an analogy for  “flashbacks” and how to show them with ease. This blog post is inspired by a lovely author from my “For Theme’s Sake” class who has a remarkable story.

First, the definition of “flashback” for story-tellers:

  • interruption of chronological sequence by interjection of events of earlier occurrence

Even though a golden rule  in story-telling is to avoid using flashbacks, sometimes the majority of the story is presented through one flowing flashback.

Here’s the analogy:

I’m composing a letter to a dear friend  who has asked me: “Tell me what all has happened to you since I last saw you seven years ago?”

I think back to seven years ago. My letter = one big flashback. To create story-flow, I shall tell my friend what has been happening in chronological order.

Perhaps I have been battling illness the past seven years, seeking various modalities for relief, and building new relationships. I’ll tell her about major events (plot points) from 2009, then 2010, 2011, 2012, 2013, 2014. I shall end the letter with what’s happening this year 2015.

[ As Plot Whisperer Martha Alderson reminds us . . . “Without cause and effect there is no plot. Without cause and effect, events are simply episodic happenings.”]

In my letter, I would be summarizing my journey  chronologically. To tell the story out of chronology would definitely confuse my friend.  I could skip over years if there were no major plot points, however, still keeping chronology – for example: I could write (relating to 2010, 2011, 2012) “For the next 3 years I kept my routine.”

In writing a book, I would be writing “scenes” chronologically, using summary to skip over time. Summary is not a substitute for a scene.

If I tell/show my flashbacks out of sequence . . . I would be “interrupting” myself and confusing the reader which would result in losing reader’s attention.

Here’s an aid to show flashbacks in sequence and with ease . . . print a calendar or calendars that correspond to the timeline of your story. In my above analogy of writing a letter to tell my friend what happened to me . . .  if my illness began in March 2009, I would begin with March 2009 and tell my adventure in chronology (not jumping back and forth in time).

 

If I were talking to my friend in person . . . and if I start to get mixed up regarding sequence of events . . . my friend would be able to say to me: “I’m confused.”  In writing a book, if I tell events out of sequence, the reader would not have the benefit of asking me for clarification; most likely the confused reader would put down my book.

The other major reason for showing flashbacks in sequence is to show character growth and consequences. In my above analogy . . . my reaction, decisions, action in March influence my reaction, decision, action in April . . . a calendar moves forward, not back and forth.

If my story timeline is one week . . . my reaction, decisions, action on Monday influence my reaction, decision, action on Tuesday  . . . calendar moves forward, not back and forth.

Two movies where the majority of the story is shown in one flowing flashback are Kitty Foyle (Ginger Rogers portrays protagonist) and Flawless (Demi Moore portrays protagonist) – in both stories, the beginning scene and the last scene are shown in current time; the body of the story (what happened?) is shown in one continuous flashback.

Happy Writing and Rewriting!

Sincerely,

Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan

 

Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan  teaches writers how to transform their email signature-blocks, photos, videos, social media, website/blog descriptions into platform statements . . . to attract target audience/readers/fans . . . before and after publication.  http://WritingCoachTeresa.com and  https://www.youtube.com/user/teresaleyung

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She is the creator of:

  • classes, including:
    • *For Theme’s Sake: Edit Your Own Manuscript Before Pitching to Agents or Self-Publishing
    • *Heroes, Tricksters, and Villains – What Do These Archetypes Want in Your Story World?
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  • Immigrant Experience Writing Contest
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  • interactive presentations, including:
    • *Help Your Fans Find YOU
    • *Build & Retrofit Your Writer’s Platform

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the author of:

  • Build Your Writer’s Platform & Fanbase In 22 Days: Attract Agents, Editors, Publishers, Readers, and Media Attention NOW (workbook);
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  • Love Made of Heart: a Daughter, a Mother, a Journey Through Mental Illness (novel used in college classes and archived at the San Francisco History Center);
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  • “Talking to My Dead Mom Monologues” (the first monologue received an award from Redwood 10-Minute Play Contest and was staged at the 6th Street Playhouse in Santa Rosa, CA);
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  • her blog (which attracts tens of thousands of writers) at http://WritingCoachTeresa.com helps writers build their platforms before and after publication

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and a proud member of:

  • California Writers Club (3 branches! And a past president of the San Francisco Peninsula Branch); and a recipient of the Jack London Award for outstanding service to California Writers Club;
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  • Women’s National Book Association-San Francisco Chapter (a past board member).

 

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Greetings from Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan . . .  I started writing my first memoir at the beginning of the year and by mid-year I have been avoiding crowds and parties. When I’m not presenting at writers’ conferences and writers’ organizations or helping clients build their fanbases, I meet up with colleagues to write and conduct research for my own books.

Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan Encourages Hardworking Writers to Have Fun with Colleagues

author Teresa LeYung-Ryans believes in Libraries Open Doors Open Minds - photo by Sasa

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author, traveler, tour director Sasa Southard inspires students to open doors open minds - photo by Coach Teresa

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Margie Yee Webb happy with her new anthology on cats, complements her Cat Mulan book - photo by Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan

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Vicki Weiland, Teresa LeYung-Ryan, Margie Yee Webb, Elisa Sasa Southard on Work Retreat

 

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authors Teresa LeYung-Ryan and Lynn Scott at Legend of Honor, SF - photo by Annie

 

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authors Teresa LeYung-Ryan and Lynn Scott - photo by Leanna at Melody Cafe (delicious food!), San Francisco

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Memoirist Lynn Scott visits neighborhood of her Oldham Street stories - photo by Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan

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authors Margie Yee Webb and Teresa LeYung-Ryan working, writing, researching

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Plot Whisperer Martha Alderson, Memoirist Luisa Adams, Author and Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan - work and eat

 

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Founder of  THE UNLEASHED HOMEMAKER(tm) and “Your Writing Mentor” Mary E. Knippel just called!  She and I calendared 2 work days at her home.  Yahoo!

Founder of THE UNLEASHED HOMEMAKER(tm) and"Your Writing Mentor" Mary E. Knippel and Fanbase-Building Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan--photo by Anne Campagnet-Reed

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Teresa LeYung-Ryan, Sheryl Fairchild, Margie Yee Webb at Regional Parks Botanic Garden – photo by Cat Daffer

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Teresa LeYung-Ryan looking forward to being with Margaret Davis, Diane Warner, Winifred McCaffrey soon

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On Saturday, Sept. 13, 2014, 7:00pm

I shall be reunited with award-winning author Carol Sheldon when I interview her at her book launch for her third book A Sleuth in Sausalito. This will be the one time that I look forward to a packed house, because I am happy for Carol – she is a brilliant author and a delightful person. Cheers to Carol Sheldon and Left Coast Writers!

by popular demand, Fanbase-Building Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan interviews award-winning author Carol Sheldon

at Book Passage, 51 Tamal Vista Blvd, Corte Madera, CA  94925

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And, I’ll get to see artist, filmmaker, blogger Chandra Garsson soon! http://flyingpaintproductions.blogspot.com/

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For fabulous organizations, check out Women’s National Book Association, California Writers Club, and San Francisco Writers Conference.

http://www.lovemadeofheart.com/Writers-Resources.html

Sincerely,

Fanbase-Building Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan helps writers transform email signature blocks, photos, website descriptions, and YouTube videos into platform statements . . . before and after publication.
http://writingcoachTeresa.com
  • author of Build Your Writer’s Platform & Fanbase In 22 Days: Attract Agents, Editors, Publishers, Readers, and Media Attention NOW. Click here for print edition. Click here for Kindle edition.
  • author of Love Made of Heart: a Mother’s Mental Illness Forges Forgiveness in Daughter Ruby
  • author of “Talking to My Dead Mom” monologue series
  • proud member and past officer of Women’s National Book Association-SF Chapter
  • proud member (SF Peninsula, Redwood, Sacramento branches) and past president (San Francisco Peninsula Branch) of California Writers Club

 

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Writing Coach Teresa Recommends Contests, Meet the Agents and Editors, Conferences, Retreats, and Resources for Writers

 

Please help your writer-friends by sharing these events and opportunities:

  • Writing Contests   3 groups of contests – through California Writers Club-Sacramento Branch, Literary Arts Division of the San Mateo County Fair, and WriterAdvice

sponsored by San Francisco Chapter of Women’s National Book Association -  Space is limited! Cost: $65 WNBA members, $75 non-members
Mary E. Knippel & Catharine Bramkamp will be coaches at this event

  • Redwood Writers “From Pen to Published” is an all-day writers’ conference on Saturday, April 26, 2014 at the Santa Rosa Junior College, Santa Rosa, CA.  Craft, Genre, Publishing, Marketing: Select among four tracks with sixteen sessions.
  • If a friend would like a CD or MP3 of sessions at SFWC – Go to VWTapes

 

I’m cheering for you!

Sincerely,

22-Day Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan

http://writingcoachTeresa.com 

Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan is the author of Build Your Writer’s Platform & Fanbase In 22 Days: Attract Agents, Editors, Publishers, Readers, and Media Attention NOWShe helps clients identify their themes and archetypes   “Reach out, not stress out.”

Teresa’s novel Love Made of Heart: a Mother’s Mental Illness Forges Forgiveness in Daughter Ruby is used in college courses and archived at the San Francisco History Center.

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Celebrating Donna Rankin Love, her book Walking for Our Lives, and International Day of Peace September 21, 2012

 

Author Donna Rankin Love says:

“September 21, 2012, 6:30-8:00pm at Gallery Bookstore in Mendocino, CA, I will present Walking for Our Lives, my memoir of the 3700 mile peace walk in 1986 from Los Angeles to New York City to Washington, DC.  My Great Peace March tent-mate, Connie Fledderjohann, who lives in Fort Bragg, has arranged the book-signing event. She emailed recently to tell me that her Quaker community is planning a peace meditation and that perhaps the activist group Women in Black will hold a silent demonstration for peace at the Gallery Bookstore.

A celebration of Peace Day and, incidentally, my 85th birthday!  What a gift to be a part of  peaceful consciousness. A day on which I can figuratively light candles of  hope,  blow out the birthday cake candles and wish those near and far”

 

Books by Donna Rankin Love:

Walking for Our Lives

To Make the House Complete

Tell Me a Story

I celebrate Donna Rankin Love (who is Plot Whisperer Martha Alderson’s beloved aunt) and all her work to promote peace.

We know what Donna cares about. 

What do you care about?  Tell us by submitting a comment to this post.  Click on the blue header of this post, scroll down to get the boxes, fill in the boxes and press [submit comment] button.  Consider keeping a copy of your comment (before pressing submit-comment button) and use it in your own email signature-block and on other blogs.

Sincerely,

Writers’ Platform & Fanbase-Building Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan

“Reach out, not stress out, to materialize your dearest dreams.”
http://writingcoachteresa.com

Please click here to see Coach Teresa interviewed by Frank Mallicoat on Channel 5 Bay Sunday - the show was aired on September 9, 2012, 5:30am.

 

Plot Whisperer Martha Alderson (who will be presenting her workshop on April 7, 2012 at CWC-Sacramento Writing Academy series Thank you Margie Yee Webb for reminding me) tells Writing Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan about Una King and TRAIL BLAZING WOMEN Authors

Una King wrote:

Dear Teresa: Martha Alderson told me you especially liked my story of integrating the San Francisco Cable cars for women. There is a group of “TRAIL BLAZING WOMEN” authors, mostly in their 80-90′s, who could use support in their effort on the Children’s Reading Room project. Perhaps, if you found some time, you could visit the project site, my page here at facebook–Children’s Reading Room. If you feel women, aged 80-90′s who are still going strong as authors, deserve support, perhaps you would feel like making a positive comment on the project to your friends. These pioneering women could really use any and all support. When I think of Ms. Buscho, 93 and still going strong as an author, I bless every day she is still with us. Thank you, Teresa. Una King, author of Tiny Tug, Adventures on San Francisco Bay (a children’s book)

Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan here to thank Una King and all the TRAIL BLAZING WOMEN” authors for their work to benefit the Children’s Reading Room project.

I see from Una King’s facebook page that she’ll be on radio every Sunday:

Hey folks: Sunday, April 1, 2012, 10:00 AM to 11:00 AM (Pacific time), and every Sunday thereafter, please check out my new live FM radio show, on 107.3FM  “Children’s Reading Room by Una King.” It is also simulcast via Podcast throughout America on http://www.kows.fm/

Una, I’d like to introduce you to Amy Gorman.

Amy Gorman’s book, Aging Artfully, is about the twelve women aged 85-105 who inspired this work. It’s also about promoting positive healthy aging for the general public, and for advocating involvement with the creative arts in retirement years. It’s never too late to start something new…it could prolong your life!  http://www.agingartfully.com/

Cheering for Una, Amy, and their colleagues and fans!

And, sending Angel Effie Lee Morris  (trail-blazing woman, children’s librarian, literacy advocate, founding-president of Women’s National Book Association-San Francisco Chapter) big smiles!

Sincerely,

Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan

Coach Teresa says: “Reach out, not stress out, to materialize your dearest dreams!”

http://writingcoachteresa.com

As editor/story consultant, Coach Teresa helps her clients polish their manuscripts by identifying their themes, universal archetypes, front-story and back-story.

Build Your Writer’s Platform & Fanbase In 22 Days: Attract Agents, Editors, Publishers, Readers, and Media Attention NOW - in print edition and Kindle e-book edition

Love Made of Heart is used in college composition classes. Thank you, Teachers & Students!

 

 

 

 

Coach Teresa, what happened on Friday Feb. 17, 2012 at San Francisco Writers Conference?

Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan here . . . this is what happened from my POV. Please tell me and my colleagues your point of view by submitting comments to this blog post.  How? Click on the blue title bar of this post, scroll down to get the boxes, fill in boxes and click on “submit comment” button.

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Elisa Sasa Southard arrived at my home before 7:00am and off we went.  I had packed chicken meatball/naan breakfast roll-ups for us. We were inside the Mark Hopkins before 8:00am. Thank you, author Birgit Soyka and Tessa Bertoldi, for helping us distribute session hand-out material and keep track of time at our 9:00am-9:45am presentation “Blowing Up Your Balloon: Writing a Tagline That Will Sell You and Your Book”

Writers' Platform-Building Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan and Elisa Sasa Southard promote SFWC everywhere--even on Go-With-Sasa's automobile

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Audrey Fairchild & Julaina Kleist & Jordan Bernal gracious reps at SFWC--photo by presenter & Writers' Platform-Building Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan

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SFWC Heroes make conference a huge success--photo by Story Consultant & Writers-Platform-Building Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Elisa “Sasa” Southard & Teresa LeYung-Ryan 

Blowing Up Your Balloon: Writing a Tagline That Will Sell You and Your Book

Attend this session if you want to:
•    hook agents, acquisition editors, readers, media attention
•    make your name synonymous with the themes you write about
•    have fun building your writer’s platform

YOUR NAME: _________________________________________________________

Before Talking Tagline: _______________________________________________________________________________________

AFTER crafting your personalized “talking tagline” from this workshop: ____________________

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Elisa “Sasa”’s definition of talking-tagline: “A one-sentence pitch that transforms every encounter into a marketing moment.”

Coach Teresa’s definition of platform: “Making your name stand for something—to attract targeted consumers—who are likely to buy what you have to sell.”

My next steps:
•    Go to http://BreakThroughTheNoise.com and watch Elisa’s TV clip about talking-taglines.
•    Go to http://WritingCoachTeresa.com click on “Coach Teresa’s Blog” and bookmark it.
•    I shall ____________________________________________________________

 

Elisa Sasa Southard & Teresa LeYung-Ryan’s session—crafting your talking-tagline & building writer’s platform & fanbase

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Elisa Sasa Southard and Teresa LeYung-Ryan say: "Help yourself by helping other writers"

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Elisa Sasa Southard & Teresa LeYung-Ryan show how using talking-taglines & building writer's platform are as fun as keeping balloons in the air--photo by Tessa Bertoldi

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Elisa Sasa Southard & Teresa LeYung-Ryan attract writers who want to create their talking taglines and build their platforms and fanbases--photo by Tessa Bertoldi

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Elisa “Sasa” Southard wears 2 hats:

•    As author of Break Through the Noise, 9 Tools to Propel Your Marketing Message, she helps writers turn personal skills into marketing talent http://BreakThroughTheNoise.com

•    As creator of Big City Travel Skills Project, Sasa helps young travelers turn into smart and savvy adventurers

http://elisaonassignment.com/

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Teresa LeYung-Ryan also wears 2 hats:

•    As author of Build Your Writer’s Platform & Fanbase In 22 Days: Attract Agents, Editors, Publishers, Readers, and Media Attention NOW, she coaches writers on making their names synonymous with the themes/subject matters/issues they write about.

•    As editor/story consultant, she helps writers polish their manuscripts by identifying their themes and archetypes

Her novel Love Made of Heart is used in college composition classes.

http://writingcoachteresa.com

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testimonials from Elisa Sasa Southard & Teresa LeYung-Ryan's USE Your Talking Tagline to Build Your Writer's Platform session at SFWC

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story consultant & writers' platform-building coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan and Birgit Sokya (author of To Drink the Wild Air) are colleagues at Women's National Book Association

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Author & SFWC Marketing Director Barbara Santos works out details with Mark Hopkins staff

 

 

 

 

 

author and writing coach Catharine Bramkamp with career advisor Rebecca Martin of DearJane.info at SFWC–photo by Writers’ Platform-Building Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan

 

 

 

 

 

presenters Elisa Sasa Southard and Teresa LeYung-Ryan and historical novelist Pamela Tartaglio

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At lunchtime, the room’s energy fell to deep sadness when Elizabeth Pomada told us that Shirley Fong-Torres (who delighted us last year at SFWC) died a few months after the 2011 conference. Shirley was only 64. I am so sad for her family. Blossom branches in a huge vase on the SFWC stage reminded us of Shirley’s vibrance.

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Lisa See’s keynote speech was most inspiring.  Lisa said when she reads a book she reads the beginning, then the ending, then back and forth until she reaches the middle; then she’ll read the ending again. Coach Teresa here . . . to remind my clients . . . Before you rework the beginning of your novel or memoir, review your ending.  Lisa’s reading m.o. is a helpful trick for writers. As Plot Whisperer Martha Alderson says: “The beginning foreshadows the ending.” “The ending dictates the beginning.”

Read fabulous story-teller Lisa Lee’s books!

 

Julaina Kleist with Lisa See (author of Peony in Love, Snow Flower and the Secret Fan, On Gold Mountain, Dreams of Joy) and BookShop West Portal Neal Sofman at SFWC -- photo by story consultant & writers' platform-building coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan (presenter, author)

 

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Cyberspace Genius Linda Lee empowers writers at SFWC--photo by Platform-Building Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan

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Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan advises prescriptive nonfiction author Jodi Lobozzo Aman of New York to buy domain names that are synonymous with her themes

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author Margie Yee Webb chats with SFWC advisory board member Harvey Pawl while Barbara Santos works out details with Mark Hopkins rep-- photo by Coach Teresa

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Alexis Masters and Margie Yee Webb author of Cat Mulan's Mindful Musings spread joy at SFWC--photo by Writers' Platform-Building Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Alan Rinzler’s keynote speech at 5:00pm gave us a glimpse into 50 years of the publishing world. Fascinating!  Alan was the acquisition editor who believed in Claude Brown’s 1,400-page manuscript when no one else at the publishing house did. Alan helped Claude edit the book to 400 pages  Manchild in the Promised Land: A Modern Classic of the Black Experience.

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SFWC presenters Teresa LeYung-Ryan & Nina Amir & Mary E. Knippel

Stephanie Carroll & Anna-Marie McLemore & author-- scholarship benefactor Victoria Hudson & Lisa Mattson--photo by Platform-Building Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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I saw Scott James aka Kemble Scott!  Scott is an inspiration and generous mentor in the publishing arena.

actor Will Southard & Elisa Sasa Southard of GO-with-Sasa celebrate SFWC--photo by Writers' Platform-Building Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan

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actor Will Southard & author Elisa Sasa Southard 2012 Feb 17 photo by Story Consultant Teresa LeYung-Ryan

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Sincerely

Coach Teresa LeYung-Ryan

“Reach out, not stress out, to materialize your dearest dreams!”

http://writingcoachteresa.com
author of Build Your Writer’s Platform & Fanbase In 22 Days: Attract Agents, Editors, Publishers, Readers, and Media Attention NOW

As editor/story consultant, Coach Teresa helps her clients polish their manuscripts by identifying themes and archetypes.

Her novel Love Made of Heart is used in college composition classes. Thank you, Teachers & Students!

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to sneak preview the exercises for Day 1 & Day 2, go to Amazon books

 

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Coach Teresa, what does it mean when an agent says my story is episodic?

Authors of novels, memoirs, children’s novels–this advice is for you.

Episodic = This happens, then this happens, then that happens… An episodic story is not compelling because there’s no connection between character growth and action plotline.

The answer: Show the transformation of your protagonist(s) . . . not because “things happen to her/him” but because her/his choices/behavior lead her/him to the next step, to the next step, as she/he goes after what she/he wants.

Examine every scene. Ask yourself this question: What does your protagonist want in this scene?  What is she/he afraid of?  Who/What is the antagonist in this scene?

As Plot Whisperer Martha Alderson says:  “When the dramatic action changes the character at depth over time, the story becomes thematically significant.”

Re-read your favorite book that has a similar premise as yours.

Cheering for writers!
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Coach Teresa says: “Reach out, not stress out, when pursuing your dreams!”

Want to attract agents  & publishers?  Want to be your own publisher?

Email:  writingcoachTeresa    at    gmail.com

http://writingcoachTeresa.com

Coach Teresa  LeYung-Ryan

specializes in:   novels   / children’s novels  / memoirs



 

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